“What’s ‘The Heat Factor’?” Tanka 2072


(July 12, k2018)

Breeze-tease sours* the shade

under a solar broiler:

More luck tomorrow!

 

Eighty-five feels just so fine

when three-digits show in red!

 

  • (Original version shows “..scours the shade” but I though “sours the shade” a possible better – or more temporal – affect.)

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